independentmegara
Hero In Training
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Post by independentmegara on Jun 13, 2008 3:02:29 GMT -5
...well i thought this up..when my stomach act up.it reallyhurts and it gave me some weird idea...when i was playing sims2XD.. some how this kind of story is connected to the sims 2 itself..hahaXD although its like a thousands of BC...hehe...IN GREECE too _________________Start____________Start_______________ _______________ Chapter 1 The start of the almost end _________________________ Well as usual people doesnt know who to worship or to give offerings...but the greeks had this idea to worship the one who looks like them.but as in the greeks mind.they're often there up in the clouds.they're the one very one controlling they're everyday life.Well in there mind there is a possibility cause zeus has given this single girl her wish. "Meg we're ready,you got everything hunny?"Hercules was some prize any girl could ever have.Well meg was the trophy of the boy and hercules was a winning prize of the girl but we dont wanna get you all readers offended by this. Meg:yah i think so..*huffles* oof!...i could use a little help here! Hercules:oh.here*carries the luggage*..sorry bout that. Meg:well..come on i dont wanna stick around..i dont even want phil to caught us up. Hercules:*whisper*wow...this girl's got ideas Meg:what? Hercules:nothing*rides pegasus*hold on tight.Oh and dont be scared of heights.i'll be always here.just hold on to my shoulders Meg:*rides pegasus and talks in her mind" ive never expected you would turn out like this herc.i hope you wouldnt change* There they flew for a long vacation.they left notes on the table and the food storage just for phil to look for them.Says:Phil me and meg are out of town for me to score more odds to fight.i have brought megso she would be more safe than the athens life there.we will be comming home soon.we expected no wrecks. hope to see you soon,as meg said. P.S dont let any gods in only zeus and no parties! - herc and meg_________________to be continued______________________ to be continued cause of my computer shutting itself again
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Post by Herc's_Girl on Jun 14, 2008 0:57:42 GMT -5
What's with the blank lines?
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Post by megatude on Jun 28, 2008 21:08:19 GMT -5
I hate my computer too.
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independentmegara
Hero In Training
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Post by independentmegara on Jul 27, 2008 5:31:25 GMT -5
:)Continuation!!!!XD _________________________________ The flight has started.Phil Was shocked,They just wrote and didnt even told him.Phil,Since he didnt know what to do he was giving himself Negative ideas"What if monsters attack the city?!what if spartans go against athens!?
"Dont worry to much!!!" A voice above he's head was heard He thought it was a ghost and force to look up to check,It was Zeus!
Phil:oh mighty zeus!!forgive me! Zeus:No need to be sorry and dont treat me that way.You dont need to cry phil,we're here for the odds Phil:oh..sure..sure okay..Nods
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Meg was shaking as herc noticed he commanded pegasus to fly low as possible but they we're caught up among the clouds.The problem started here.The map got hung up by the wind and flew away.Hercules doesnt know what to do and where to go,But he tried Remembering the picture of the map,So to speak they passed the small town where they was to take vacations. Since it had happen pegasus dropped and landed safely to this unknown town in the middle of the meadow right down the slopes
Meg:*Coughs* where are we? Hercules:i dont know.But since i lost the map that was blown by the wind away..soomeg interupts the following words Meg:You lost the map!?oh herc how can we get back now?! Hercules:..Umm..make the most of what we got i guess. Meg:fine..fine..im not dropping this.as soon as the wind returns that map i'll be thankful.for now..i would scoop and explore the town. Hercules:You'll be needing me. Meg:hun.Dont worry i'll be fine.For now you should get a place to rest our heads. Hercules:sure but becareful i'll be staying in the meadow for a while
Meg walked away and soon disappeared among herc's eyes but he knew she would come back to take her body on bed to be rest. While herc's looking for a place to stay,Meg explored the town.She noticed everyone,Almost everyone except her always do the boring and daily routine its like they're controlled.And she was getting afraid thinking she really needs hercules to stay sides with her,Because of this.Seeing a graveyard in the middle of this town and a strange weather they're having here makes her feel she's gonna have a flu.She walked passing among the people who's chatting and without a sight passing at the next town connected to the other small villages,Sooner disappeared among eyes.
Meg:strange town this is,i should go back to herc and let himself see this
When turning around meg saw a shadow among those fogs sooner two arms took her away by force and a strange scent made her unconcious then she later fainted.Her sweet face was as red as ever. ................................................................................................... Chapter II The Secret of the town _________________________________________________ Meg finally woke up but found herself tide up in a strange metal that not even anyone could get away.Its like a magnet that pulled her away from anything and anyone.She tried to move but the metal was in electric wave that could hurt her till she would bleed among her soft arms.Later on a door opened and she could hear voices and laughs.
Man1:I bet she could be as lust as ever Man2:with that body of hers i cant stand here just sitting around! Man3:Enough with your foolish minds and idiotic words!!!!!i would like you to remember this is a hero's girl we're talking about.We need to find how this device would work at her mind.She's Uncontrollable.Its like something else was controlling this girl. MAn2:What would that be!?Herself maybe Man1:not quite. Man3:i dont care what kind.or what else.What i would like is to her be one of the people out there!!!
The strange voices going nearer and as a minute meg pretended to be out cold when the door opened up.
Man3:look at her.she's perfect for my clan Man2:Soo why even revive the graveyard?the ghost are upset and haunting the town around here Man3:i want a little hardwork around here ive put the cams on and saw no ghost but as fun as it seems putting a small village above the dead's heads are a joy to be. Man1:i dont think that's a good idea though. MAn3:nevermind that!Wake the girl up!
When meg heard this words she was suprised.And opened her eyes and looked at the men talking
Man3:nevermind!she's awake Meg:who are you!?you wont get away with this!!!you hear me! Man3:im hearing you now.Tie her mouth up
the men tied meg's mouth between lips using a cloth and not fast she was sweating like the other while ago where she fainted.she was outcold again and seeing nothing but black she dilated her eyes and saw she was in a different room. __________________________________________________ To be continued!!!! Sorry for the stops. cause someone was comming!!!my dad and he doesnt want me wasting my time online... ;D
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Post by herclov3r on Jul 27, 2008 5:40:30 GMT -5
sounds interesting, tell me what happens next
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independentmegara
Hero In Training
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Post by independentmegara on Jul 27, 2008 6:05:18 GMT -5
sure i will as soon as possible
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independentmegara
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Post by independentmegara on Jul 28, 2008 4:45:59 GMT -5
Continuation ___________________________________ V V V ___________________________________
Man3:have fun with your new room*laughs*
At loud barks.Soon meg heard a scary sounds coming from the dark area and there something was crawling,out from the light a pale hand then following the rest of the body parts.The head rolled out first.Meg was afraid this will be the last.She saw a smoke coming out from the dead hand that passed the light from the window.But its already twilight,Soon it'll be night.When night rises they could move towards her fast.She saw a lamp at her side.She kicked it then it slide infront of her.Light overcome the dark areas.But behind her was as dark as a night.She saw shining eyes.But for once she was thanked that someone opened the lights and it was like the sun.The bulb would light up the room the dead turned into ashes.
then the door opened,The man brought a large box.Something was barking and growling inside.He opened the box and quickly ran.There was bumping and growling and a metal like sound that would move.She watched the box be eaten and ripped apart.There stood in four arms a red 3 headed dog.It was thin and looking dead as ever some of the body parts we're shown. meg quickly put her mind first.and thought of a plan.
She swiped a piece of stick from the wood that was cut and kicked it over the bloody pool at the other side of the hound and hit a piece of human meat which coming towards the hound.
Meg:hey mutt!look at your left! Cerberus's child:Well well the glory of the human..
She saw a thorn like metal beside the chains and when the thorn metal trace up the chain it burned the single chain to pieces of powder. She quickly ran to the door and 2 man held her hard the other would hit her on the head.She fainted but got a little injury that bleeded the floor.they dropped Megara and she hitted the floor hard still holding her head.
man3:why are there blood on my floor.And what's the girl doing here?! man2:im sorry sir. Man3:pea brain!!!imbeciles!!!take her to the clinic and get her back in the chains this time i want it to be harder.Put thorns to it aswell. if she escape.Use the whip lace. Man1:but sir.She's just 18,We cant use the lace.Its thorned up already. Man3:we are part of this rituals..the dead would soon rise. _________________________________________________ to be continued.. sorry again..i have to pause..
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independentmegara
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Post by independentmegara on Jul 28, 2008 8:00:20 GMT -5
Continuation!!! +++++++++++++++++++++ man1:As you wish sir.But we are your younger brothers.Aslan,Listen to us...If you kill the girl..Then Hercules would kill our brothers as well... Aslan:Do Not worry that Astin,Hercules doesnt kill.He vengeance Astin:okay,But im not into this.Lets go Sheanti Sheanti:You know brother..he has a point... Then Astin and Sheanti carried meg all the way to the clinic.The traditional ways of curing a person they did to her.Then she was back to the chains.The thorns woke her up with pain almost like a needle that was passing through the soft arms of hers. This would wake her as possible.She was In tears. She groaned and weep Astin:We're not really responsible for this.Forgive our sins meg. Meg:dont worry...I forgive you though...And apologize to the gods not to me....Why did you do this anyway? Sheanti:we're in control by our brother. Meg:umm about those words about my body!? Astin:eeehhh...us..sorry Sheanti:we really want you out but we have to do our jobs and take over this strange power that aslan's being using to us. Meg: sighs okay..But i...hurry!!my arms are bleeding...ugh..my head Soon not long meg fainted.The medical band from her head was bleeding.The wound must have opened up.Not longer this might infect and gets worse. _________________________________________________ Chapter 3 Midnight killer _________________________________________________ Hercules was getting worried Pegasus kept taking peeps from the window. Hercules:i know.Its already the night...And not even a voice i could hear from her..This place is quite spooky though..And dangerous.But I cant do anything ...We cant get out from the clouds..Its foggy outside.Even the lights cant get through. Pegasus sat down on the wooden floor and still looking from outside.Its already 7 from the stone clock.And not a sign of her shadow.Later.The lamp went off.It was dark from hercules's cabin Then he lit the lamps again saw pegasus lying down the floor.He's head was bleeding but not hard. Hercules:pegasus!!Does it hurt more?!Take a rest here i'll go look for meg.With this clue.She might be kidnapped! After hercules ran out of the cabin,Astin and sheanti tied pegasus's arms and legs together like a captured bull. Astin:we're sorry. After this they ran out from the cabin.There was blood everywhere!And when the door took itself off.Hercules heard this and got back.He saw pegasus moving like a wild animal but the two man forgot to tie he's wings.Hercules untied the rope and band the bleeding head.He took he's sword and rode pegasus. Hercules:pegasus!look the road towards the village we stayed is disappearing from the fog.Follow the smoke !!! __________________________________ To be continued..ughh!!again!! ..sorry im soo busy..cause here in philippines is school days..Summer is till march to may...ughh
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Mercury
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Post by Mercury on Jul 28, 2008 10:42:03 GMT -5
lol, nice story! ^^ Though I'm a bit confused :S
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independentmegara
Hero In Training
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Post by independentmegara on Aug 1, 2008 6:30:17 GMT -5
Its about a strange town they accidentally landed.That says a myth that its already been a thousand years since it was built and supposely you would only find a graveyard no town or village.So herc tried to find a way to get out of the place.Since its foggy and nor light or any shiney bright cant get pass the fog.Herc would soon discover that.That town is a ghost town..meaning the brothers rebuilt the town above the dead's head and then disturbed the peace.They would be having vengeance upon the 3 brothers to teach them lesson.But the main food for them is the living.Soo..its kinda like...herc would do task to save the citizens and let them rest in peace.. __________________________________________ i would be continuing the fan fic..about a week or a days..cause i have tons of things to do:)
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Post by prophetofdoom on Aug 1, 2008 15:26:39 GMT -5
Not a bad fic you have here, I have a few pieces of advice, and please do not take offense ^.^ Don't use slang outside of dialogue. In the text you shouldn't write words like "gonna" it gives the writing a sloppy feeling to it, only use it when someone is speaking, or you are using their words of thought. IE) I'm gonna vomit* Meg thought cynically. It makes the writing a LOT smoother when you avoid slang in text. =) The jumping from script format to prose is very confusing at times, it makes it difficult to follow in some places. But the story itself is pretty interesting, I like it so far Please don't take my criticisms to heart, its just some advice, its not meant to be critical. Please update soon!
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independentmegara
Hero In Training
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Post by independentmegara on Aug 3, 2008 7:51:50 GMT -5
dont worry^_^ its your own opinion.Im not going to take that soo seriouslyXD haha:)
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Post by prophetofdoom on Aug 20, 2008 10:33:04 GMT -5
When are you gonna update, I love this fic ^.^
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independentmegara
Hero In Training
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Post by independentmegara on Sept 26, 2008 11:00:32 GMT -5
Continuation ______________________________ as they followed the smoke..they soon encountered the living dead.
Ghouls:uuuuuu........ Hercules:we're outnumbered we have to go back to the cabin!...come on...
After this night.Hercules stayed up to think of a plan.He opened the window's when the sun rose above.In a shock of what herc saw.It returned to its own past.A normal silent little town in the middle of no where. Now the place was brought somewhere else. Meanwhile....
Meg woke up when the sun shone against her face.the window was open.She saw a peaceful town.But to her head it all began to be a graveyard.She was weeping in tears,her head was bleeding,her arm aswell Astin:You wished herc was here to save you? Meg:....yes*hiding in sorrow*...why do you have to follow your brother!!!!!you've destroyed this town... Astin:im sorry meg...i cant answer that... Sheanti:i can...entering the room...here's the story...
aslan and the 2 of us was born equally,but zeus said that we have brought badluck to the country before born...We believed that one of the goddesses that possed us with that unlucky type was eris..the chaos one.aslan believed that eris caused the several deaths of our neighbors.
astin cuts in
Astin:you see..Aslan thinks you look like eris Meg:breathes deeply while in half paintha..that's impossible...ugh...y.you can still...cha..change everything if you..wa..want..
Astin:your right..takes the devices off from meg
Aslan:put those back!!taser's sheanti and astin Meg dropped onto the floor and widen her eyes..blood flowed down from her mouth Meg:i.i think you shouldnt choose for them...le..let them choose Aslan:stay out of this you forsaken idiot!!!
Meg tried standing up but she felt wobbly as a soft pillow.
Meg:i think you need a hand astin...
Meg's tear dropped onto he's face and gave him a chance. and a strenght
Astin:chuckles softlywe're sorry we hi..hi..hit you pretty hard..
Meg:its alright....shouts
A maximum shocked meg and layed down outcold.Aslan carried meg and tied her to a poll beneath it was a large graveyard.
Aslan:goodbye meggy..Laughs
As the door closes.Darkness gave the dead life.They soon rose and others tried to climb the poll to get to the prey. meg cant shout though her lips are sealed from the rope and we're weak to move out.Her body was covered with wounds. Everything started out to be blurry from her sight.
Aslan:No more interuptions...as soon as i head to the middle dessertio i will let Hounduro rise.then have the power to control and to get my revenge!
End of chapter3
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independentmegara
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Post by independentmegara on Sept 27, 2008 5:29:31 GMT -5
Chapter 4 Hounduro,The great
Aslan took he's 2 brothers and teleport to the middle dessertio He took out a stick and aimed the middle of the dessertio.The stick stood up and twisted.Great voices and lost souls came out. Hounduro was roaring.Her paws was nailed on the ground with blue flare.
Aslan:hounduro the great..Welcome to the middle age.Ive been Waiting for the right moment to come..!!!
Aslan jumped from the portal and attached a magnet from hounduro.The wolf quickly gestured but electricity damages hounduro.Aslan left his 2 brothers in the middle dessertio and teleported back to the lab.
Aslan made hounduro sleep deeply and he started he's experments.He then teleported to the strange town. Back there hercules just sat down and blamed himself loosing he's precious stone of he's heart.without her.my heat would fall apart.Shattered..and this time i let myself do it without knowing my clumsiness would be a fault.He covered he's face and quietly cried.One of the people in strange town walked up to him and sat near him.The boy patted hercules
Boy:dont loss hope sir. Hercules:huh? Who are you?...ar..are you lost?...where do you live
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